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Can you hear me?

Can you see me?

Do you fear me?

Could you be me?

What do you think?

Could it be true?

Is it possible,

That I could be you?

Well, dear,

What do you say?

You sense that I'm here,

And I'm here to stay.

The words don't come out right,

The pain just stays in,

And there's nothing you can do about it,

No way you can win.

So let me hold you,

And watch you burn.

From dust you came,

To dust you return.
Written in the view of your enemy, whatever that may be.
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animelover246810 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing!!!😱
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That was a very dark poem. Self-inflicting, but dangerously contemptable. The ending was well thought out (the "burning red" motif) and I personally liked the way your character was vindictive, but still helpless: as if they were being bled ashes to ashes. Did rhat make sense? Its as if your character is burning inside, its clear they are being hurt and pulled down, but they don't know what to do about it, so they decide in taking their life. That's what I think anyway.
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